Hey Selena, I really like the concept you have set up here. I am not familiar with the story of Macbeth, but through your description and my understanding of Shakespeare I can imagine it is an elaborate tale with a lot of murder haha. I am really interested to see what direction you take this in and what the twist will be. I like that you’re exploring the female side of this story as well. I also like the idea of framing the story like the Making a Murderer series, I think this will be a great way to make the story stand out, and possibly make Shakespeare feel like something people from our generation can better connect with. I wonder who you will have your narrator be. An omnipotent narrator might be the easiest way forward, but telling the story through Lady Macbeth, Macbeth, or both of them might make for an interesting retelling. There is definitely a lot you could do with the “unreliable narrator” here, perhaps having both characters go insane. I am excited to see where you take this, best of luck!
Your storybook is great! I must say, that when I clicked on your storybook I was really drawn in because of the layout and the presence of the website. It is simple, clean but really effective into the start of a storybook. Lady Macbeth is a story that many people are familiar with. I really like the way that you set up the introduction. The dialogue and set up of the different witches, then narration, then Lady Macbeth creates a story that has different parts but are all incorporated within one another. I also really like the graphic you used at the end of the introduction. It kind of scared me a little! Have you thought about a different way to write who said what? The way it is written now, it is very clear who says what, but it also does not allow the character to show emotion in what is said. It is simply Macbeth says this and so forth. Maybe you could add more of a description into what they are saying. Overall this is a great storybook and I look forward to reading more of it!
Hey Selena! I love your storybook. I think it’s interesting that you chose to do a Shakespeare project. Macbeth is one of my favorite plays of his that I’ve read, and Lady Macbeth is one of my favorite characters in it! I’m excited to look more into how she changed throughout the play. I also think it’s super neat that you’re including the witches in a more obvious role because in the actual play, they seem to more or less disappear during the action. What else could you add to make this story more of your own? You’ve changed the point of view, but the setting, characters, and plot are still the same. You’re also writing it in the style of a play script. Are there more details you could add that would set this adaptation apart from the original? Also, your website looks great, and it’s easy to navigate! I like how you have action tags in bold. I would advise for you to watch out for passive voice in those action tags. The most obvious example is “A shout is heard from within the room.” Since these are tags to describe how the characters are moving and acting, the more active you can make those sentence, the better the picture will be in your readers’ heads. Keep up the good work! I’m excited to read more of this story!
Hi Selena! I’m excited that you decided to do a storybook based off of Shakespeare’s play! I think it was a great idea to have your storybook come from Lady Macbeth’s perspective. I’m even more excited to read how her character grows throughout your stories. I understand that you tried to mirror your script with the original, but it sort of hard to read. I sometimes got confused with the bolded and italicized phrases. Other than that, I really love the plot of your storybook and I think you did a great job of explaining it on your home page. Also, the layout of your website is easy and accessible! The pictures you chose were also enticing and made me want to read more. I also want to acknowledge that your story has a very modern twist to it, making it really fun to read. Great job and best of luck!
Hey Selena! Your site is so fun to navigate through. I love how you have the moving pictures. The moving picture on the bottom of the introduction creeped me out a bit but I think that was the point :). I bet your stories were pretty difficult to create since they are written in the style of a playbook. You did a really good job or making it all tie together. I have not read the original story in a long time but I am excited to read your complete spin off. I like how you have the name and pages of your future stories up already. Good luck fiinishing up your whole storybook, I think it will be great!
Hi, Selena! Your website is fun to navigate through, although it did take me a while to figure out where everything was! I do love the pictures that move though, I think they add a really nice touch to your website that I have not seen anyone else in this class do! I also really love your idea for your storybook project! I think it is really cool to be doing this project based off of Shakespeare's play! I also like the perspective you have chosen to write all of this from! I think that your project is going to turn out really well, and I definitely look forward to reading more from you as this semester goes on!
Hi Selena! I really liked how on the home page of your story you gave a little snippet of what your story is about. it was like reading the inside or back of a cover of a book. the links though, when I click on introduction on the homepage and something wicked comes this way at the end of the introduction it opens up a new tab. this is just a personal preference, it sort of bugs me. I also like how the author's notes are all at the end on their own page, may have to look into that. back to content of your storybook: the introduction. I like how it is written like a play would be. it is different, but good different. between what you have written and the images use it gives me plenty of detail on what it happening, I enjoy details. it begins: the moving picture at the top describes this scene perfectly with all the blood. I like how with each scene there is more and more drama. I can sort of see this playing out on tv like a series, each act another episode.
Hey Selena, I like how unique and creative your blog is. I think all the pictures and layout of your profile help make your stories look lively. I read your Macbeth story, It Begins, and I immediately looked at the header of the story and was like "I know this is gonna be a thriller" haha. I like how well structured your story is and how there are acts in the story just like Macbeth. My favorite part about the story is when Lady Macbeth and her Husband are plotting the murder and immediately regret what they did when they carry out the plan. I wonder if who would be knocking at the door? Could it be authorities? Just having these Curiosities make me anticipate reading your story past this section. I would say that you could add in other elements to the story to set itself apart from the inspiration so that it doesn't sound to Identical to the original but I really do enjoy reading your story. Keep up the good work!
Hello Selena! The aspect of your blog is incredibly unique and fun to read. The fact that you took something you love, plays, and made it into your story method is incredibly creative of you. I have read Macbeth once before, but I assure you that your version is far more interesting to me because I can understand its colloquialisms (unlike Shakespeare's)! I am very excited to read more of your thrilling blog and keep up with this "TV show"-esque blog.
Hello Selena! I really like how you have this project set up for this class! I also think the idea for this project was very creative and unique. It is always really cool when you can take something you are passionate about and use that for a class. It makes working on it all the more fun. I think the structuring of your story was very well done. I always love it when people break their stories up but I think it works even better when you break it down into acts like it is originally done. The way you wrote the stories flowed really well together and made me very interested to read the next one. Great job!
Hello there Selena! Can I start by saying oh my goodness. I opened the link to your storybook project and was blown away. It's so beautiful and I love that you chose to do Macbeth! I always loved that play and I didn't even think about someone in our class taking a Shakespeare approach. I appreciate that fact that you went for it. Your layout is skillfully set up; from all your images to your headers and font changes. I also think your writing style for this story fit wonderfully with each act that you wrote. Each character's dialogue was built around their personal and development so it was easy for me to follow along with any transitions. It may be bold to say this on a comment thread but, I believe your myth project has been the best one I've come across thus far! Not to say that others are bad or anything at all. I just really like and feel inspired by yours. Thank you for such an excellent read and experience! c:
I think this was one of the most beautifully written stories I have read for his class. It flowed so nicely and the images were so fitting to this story. I think it is pretty impressive that you decided to go with Macbeth and put your own spin on it. Macbeth is one I am not super familiar with as it is one that I did not read in high school, but I do know the basis. I think what you are doing is incredibly interesting and super fun to read. I want to know why you decided to do Macbeth! It is a really fun choice and one I definitely would have never thought of. Keep up he good work - I think you are doing so great! I look forward to reading more for these last few weeks.
Hey Selena! I really liked your concept! I was obsessed with the Making A Murderer series on Netflix, so this one immediately stood out to me. To start, your website is cool, but a little tricky to navigate. Maybe move the menu bar to the right and expand it, so it's the titles of the pages. The story itself is amazing! I loved the original Macbeth story, and was always intrigued by Lady Macbeth. I loved the pictures you chose as well. I thought they followed along well with your story. Really nice work! Keep it up!
Hi Selena! This is my first time coming across your project and I think the direction you decided to go in was so interesting! That is such a creative idea doing your stories formatted as a play (especially Macbeth). I remember reading that in high school, but it has definitely been a little while, so this might be a good refresher. Your website home page was very cool looking, but at first, I didn't think you had posted any stories. I soon realized you had a side menu and not an overhead one. Like I said before, I like how you decided to format your stories. That made me as a reader more intrigued and a little more engaged. I also liked how you used images all throughout your first story. That helped me get a clear picture of what you were wanting me to see/read. Great job!
Hi Selena! I'm so happy to see someone is writing their own version of Macbeth. I love the play and the superstitions associated with it (never say the name of the play in a theatre). I think it is great that you are maintaining a style of writing similar to the original. Your use of images throughout the storybook is great and really helps paint the picture of what is happening throughout the story. You have done a great job being creative with your writing, but also staying true to the story and its characters. As a reader, I was pulled in by your vocabulary, pictures, and style of writing. Overall, your stories were very well-written and entertaining. Your website was formatted nicely, flowed well, and was easy to navigate. Great job and keep up the good work. I wish you a happy thanksgiving, safe travels, and a successful finish to the semester.
Hi Selena! I read your storybook and was very glad that I did. I have actually never read Macbeth in its entirety, I have only seen small sections of it or heard people talk about it. Because of this, it was quite interesting for me to read this since a lot of the material was new to me. I really love the way you wrote the story as a play, involving multiple acts and scenes. Your use of italics, bold, and different fonts added character to the scenes and made it easy to tell what was going on. You also included a lot of pictures, which I think increased how immersive the story was. It made it feel more like watching a play. I really enjoyed your writing overall as well. The characters seemed to have quite fitting dialogue and personalities. I think your storybook is great and unique, as the play style it is written in is not one I have seen very much. Great job!
Hey Selena, I commented on your project at the very beginning of the semester and let me say, you have done an incredible job bringing your vision to life! The aesthetic you have created is excellent and nicely permeates every story, giving the project a cohesive feel. The opening page looks like it could be a screen shot from the original Netflix series itself. The images you have included, particularly the moving ones, bring an incredible vividness to the stories. This is helpful too, as you have written in the form of a play. Plays, specifically the scripts like you have written your story, don’t lend themselves well to descriptive imagery, but I think your images have compensated for this plenty. I also have to say, what an ending. Your plot development is incredible and again the moving images really give this ending a nice punch to it. Overall, great job! You have an excellent Storybook here!
I really enjoyed reading your project. I think that the way you have it all organized works very well. I like how you have the dialog and stage notes in different fonts, it makes it easier to read and follow who is saying and doing what. The gif that you have at the top of "It Begins" is awesome and "gorrifying" (gory and horrifying)! I also thought that separating the stories into Acts was a smart move, it is a perfect way to change the setting without having to give a lot of detail on the transition. One of my favorite parts is how "the crowd gasps" when Malcolm comes back and reveals how he escaped. I like the game the Malcolm and Lady Macbeth play when she wants her guards to take him, but he keeps asking them to wait. I can picture the guards jolting forward and then halting in confusion. I would like to know what is going through the guards' minds during all of this, but I like that you let us know what's going through Lady Macbeth's mind. Overall, I did not come across anything that was confusing. I think you have done a fabulous job with your project!
Hi Selena, I just read through your storybook and I think you did a really great job. I really liked the play-like format and I thought it made your stories very easy to read while at the same time allowing you to give a lot of details. It was very interesting how you made Lady Macbeth the main character and made here have a much more involved role in the events. In the final story, I was kind of wondering where Malcom got all of the evidence that he was showing. Maybe I just read the stories too quickly to remember them being mentioned in other stories? Regardless, it didn't stop me from enjoying your stories. You did an excellent job.
Hey Selena! I am a big Shakespeare fan so this was a fun read for me. I did Theatre in high school and know of Macbeth since it is the “scottish play that shouldn’t be named” and this was such a creative twist on that. I especially liked how dark your whole website theme was. It tied in well with the dark story of Macbeth and his wife pushing him to murder. I think you did a great job drawing the reader in and making this story almost like a thriller. I do like scary things but this was just dark enough without being too scary for me. Really bringing Lady Macbeth into this story and making her a prominent, strong character was a great idea. Although she was a bad person, I was kind of proud of her in a way because she was so timid in the original and did not have much character.
Hi Selena! I like your "Be Careful What You Wish For" story! Your stories are incredibly creative and amazing with lots of unique characters and plots. I like how you so eloquently described the beginning scene of the story: “It's a full moon on a crisp night, yet the air is thick with malicious intent. Three witches converse in the woods, when suddenly their cauldron illuminates brighter than the Northern Star.” Wow.. it’s so rich in imagery and visual details. I also like the complimentary image! I think it really matches your description of the scene. I also like how this signpost like this “The planets will align in three nights. It is then that the veil between this world and mine will be thinnest allowing my inferno doors to open” navigates the readers so smoothly so people can follow your story and understand the plot. I also like how Lady Macbeth tells her story about Macbeth with so much love. I also like the dialogues between Lady Macbeth and Ursula; it’s so full of suspense and mind game. Thank you for a great story!
Hey Selena, I really like the concept you have set up here. I am not familiar with the story of Macbeth, but through your description and my understanding of Shakespeare I can imagine it is an elaborate tale with a lot of murder haha. I am really interested to see what direction you take this in and what the twist will be. I like that you’re exploring the female side of this story as well. I also like the idea of framing the story like the Making a Murderer series, I think this will be a great way to make the story stand out, and possibly make Shakespeare feel like something people from our generation can better connect with. I wonder who you will have your narrator be. An omnipotent narrator might be the easiest way forward, but telling the story through Lady Macbeth, Macbeth, or both of them might make for an interesting retelling. There is definitely a lot you could do with the “unreliable narrator” here, perhaps having both characters go insane. I am excited to see where you take this, best of luck!
ReplyDeleteYour storybook is great! I must say, that when I clicked on your storybook I was really drawn in because of the layout and the presence of the website. It is simple, clean but really effective into the start of a storybook. Lady Macbeth is a story that many people are familiar with. I really like the way that you set up the introduction. The dialogue and set up of the different witches, then narration, then Lady Macbeth creates a story that has different parts but are all incorporated within one another. I also really like the graphic you used at the end of the introduction. It kind of scared me a little! Have you thought about a different way to write who said what? The way it is written now, it is very clear who says what, but it also does not allow the character to show emotion in what is said. It is simply Macbeth says this and so forth. Maybe you could add more of a description into what they are saying. Overall this is a great storybook and I look forward to reading more of it!
ReplyDeleteHey Selena! I love your storybook. I think it’s interesting that you chose to do a Shakespeare project. Macbeth is one of my favorite plays of his that I’ve read, and Lady Macbeth is one of my favorite characters in it! I’m excited to look more into how she changed throughout the play. I also think it’s super neat that you’re including the witches in a more obvious role because in the actual play, they seem to more or less disappear during the action.
ReplyDeleteWhat else could you add to make this story more of your own? You’ve changed the point of view, but the setting, characters, and plot are still the same. You’re also writing it in the style of a play script. Are there more details you could add that would set this adaptation apart from the original?
Also, your website looks great, and it’s easy to navigate! I like how you have action tags in bold. I would advise for you to watch out for passive voice in those action tags. The most obvious example is “A shout is heard from within the room.” Since these are tags to describe how the characters are moving and acting, the more active you can make those sentence, the better the picture will be in your readers’ heads.
Keep up the good work! I’m excited to read more of this story!
Hi Selena! I’m excited that you decided to do a storybook based off of Shakespeare’s play! I think it was a great idea to have your storybook come from Lady Macbeth’s perspective. I’m even more excited to read how her character grows throughout your stories. I understand that you tried to mirror your script with the original, but it sort of hard to read. I sometimes got confused with the bolded and italicized phrases. Other than that, I really love the plot of your storybook and I think you did a great job of explaining it on your home page. Also, the layout of your website is easy and accessible! The pictures you chose were also enticing and made me want to read more. I also want to acknowledge that your story has a very modern twist to it, making it really fun to read. Great job and best of luck!
ReplyDeleteHey Selena! Your site is so fun to navigate through. I love how you have the moving pictures. The moving picture on the bottom of the introduction creeped me out a bit but I think that was the point :). I bet your stories were pretty difficult to create since they are written in the style of a playbook. You did a really good job or making it all tie together. I have not read the original story in a long time but I am excited to read your complete spin off. I like how you have the name and pages of your future stories up already. Good luck fiinishing up your whole storybook, I think it will be great!
ReplyDeleteHi, Selena! Your website is fun to navigate through, although it did take me a while to figure out where everything was! I do love the pictures that move though, I think they add a really nice touch to your website that I have not seen anyone else in this class do! I also really love your idea for your storybook project! I think it is really cool to be doing this project based off of Shakespeare's play! I also like the perspective you have chosen to write all of this from! I think that your project is going to turn out really well, and I definitely look forward to reading more from you as this semester goes on!
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ReplyDeleteI really liked how on the home page of your story you gave a little snippet of what your story is about. it was like reading the inside or back of a cover of a book. the links though, when I click on introduction on the homepage and something wicked comes this way at the end of the introduction it opens up a new tab. this is just a personal preference, it sort of bugs me. I also like how the author's notes are all at the end on their own page, may have to look into that. back to content of your storybook: the introduction. I like how it is written like a play would be. it is different, but good different. between what you have written and the images use it gives me plenty of detail on what it happening, I enjoy details. it begins: the moving picture at the top describes this scene perfectly with all the blood. I like how with each scene there is more and more drama. I can sort of see this playing out on tv like a series, each act another episode.
Hey Selena, I like how unique and creative your blog is. I think all the pictures and layout of your profile help make your stories look lively. I read your Macbeth story, It Begins, and I immediately looked at the header of the story and was like "I know this is gonna be a thriller" haha. I like how well structured your story is and how there are acts in the story just like Macbeth. My favorite part about the story is when Lady Macbeth and her Husband are plotting the murder and immediately regret what they did when they carry out the plan. I wonder if who would be knocking at the door? Could it be authorities? Just having these Curiosities make me anticipate reading your story past this section. I would say that you could add in other elements to the story to set itself apart from the inspiration so that it doesn't sound to Identical to the original but I really do enjoy reading your story. Keep up the good work!
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ReplyDeleteThe aspect of your blog is incredibly unique and fun to read. The fact that you took something you love, plays, and made it into your story method is incredibly creative of you. I have read Macbeth once before, but I assure you that your version is far more interesting to me because I can understand its colloquialisms (unlike Shakespeare's)! I am very excited to read more of your thrilling blog and keep up with this "TV show"-esque blog.
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ReplyDeleteHello Selena!
ReplyDeleteI really like how you have this project set up for this class! I also think the idea for this project was very creative and unique. It is always really cool when you can take something you are passionate about and use that for a class. It makes working on it all the more fun. I think the structuring of your story was very well done. I always love it when people break their stories up but I think it works even better when you break it down into acts like it is originally done. The way you wrote the stories flowed really well together and made me very interested to read the next one. Great job!
Hello there Selena! Can I start by saying oh my goodness. I opened the link to your storybook project and was blown away. It's so beautiful and I love that you chose to do Macbeth! I always loved that play and I didn't even think about someone in our class taking a Shakespeare approach. I appreciate that fact that you went for it. Your layout is skillfully set up; from all your images to your headers and font changes. I also think your writing style for this story fit wonderfully with each act that you wrote. Each character's dialogue was built around their personal and development so it was easy for me to follow along with any transitions. It may be bold to say this on a comment thread but, I believe your myth project has been the best one I've come across thus far! Not to say that others are bad or anything at all. I just really like and feel inspired by yours. Thank you for such an excellent read and experience! c:
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ReplyDeleteI think this was one of the most beautifully written stories I have read for his class. It flowed so nicely and the images were so fitting to this story. I think it is pretty impressive that you decided to go with Macbeth and put your own spin on it. Macbeth is one I am not super familiar with as it is one that I did not read in high school, but I do know the basis. I think what you are doing is incredibly interesting and super fun to read. I want to know why you decided to do Macbeth! It is a really fun choice and one I definitely would have never thought of. Keep up he good work - I think you are doing so great! I look forward to reading more for these last few weeks.
Hey Selena! I really liked your concept! I was obsessed with the Making A Murderer series on Netflix, so this one immediately stood out to me. To start, your website is cool, but a little tricky to navigate. Maybe move the menu bar to the right and expand it, so it's the titles of the pages. The story itself is amazing! I loved the original Macbeth story, and was always intrigued by Lady Macbeth. I loved the pictures you chose as well. I thought they followed along well with your story. Really nice work! Keep it up!
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ReplyDeleteThis is my first time coming across your project and I think the direction you decided to go in was so interesting! That is such a creative idea doing your stories formatted as a play (especially Macbeth). I remember reading that in high school, but it has definitely been a little while, so this might be a good refresher. Your website home page was very cool looking, but at first, I didn't think you had posted any stories. I soon realized you had a side menu and not an overhead one. Like I said before, I like how you decided to format your stories. That made me as a reader more intrigued and a little more engaged. I also liked how you used images all throughout your first story. That helped me get a clear picture of what you were wanting me to see/read. Great job!
Hi Selena! I'm so happy to see someone is writing their own version of Macbeth. I love the play and the superstitions associated with it (never say the name of the play in a theatre). I think it is great that you are maintaining a style of writing similar to the original. Your use of images throughout the storybook is great and really helps paint the picture of what is happening throughout the story. You have done a great job being creative with your writing, but also staying true to the story and its characters. As a reader, I was pulled in by your vocabulary, pictures, and style of writing. Overall, your stories were very well-written and entertaining. Your website was formatted nicely, flowed well, and was easy to navigate. Great job and keep up the good work. I wish you a happy thanksgiving, safe travels, and a successful finish to the semester.
ReplyDeleteHi Selena! I read your storybook and was very glad that I did. I have actually never read Macbeth in its entirety, I have only seen small sections of it or heard people talk about it. Because of this, it was quite interesting for me to read this since a lot of the material was new to me. I really love the way you wrote the story as a play, involving multiple acts and scenes. Your use of italics, bold, and different fonts added character to the scenes and made it easy to tell what was going on. You also included a lot of pictures, which I think increased how immersive the story was. It made it feel more like watching a play. I really enjoyed your writing overall as well. The characters seemed to have quite fitting dialogue and personalities. I think your storybook is great and unique, as the play style it is written in is not one I have seen very much. Great job!
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ReplyDeleteHey Selena, I commented on your project at the very beginning of the semester and let me say, you have done an incredible job bringing your vision to life! The aesthetic you have created is excellent and nicely permeates every story, giving the project a cohesive feel. The opening page looks like it could be a screen shot from the original Netflix series itself. The images you have included, particularly the moving ones, bring an incredible vividness to the stories. This is helpful too, as you have written in the form of a play. Plays, specifically the scripts like you have written your story, don’t lend themselves well to descriptive imagery, but I think your images have compensated for this plenty. I also have to say, what an ending. Your plot development is incredible and again the moving images really give this ending a nice punch to it. Overall, great job! You have an excellent Storybook here!
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ReplyDeleteHello Selena,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your project. I think that the way you have it all organized works very well. I like how you have the dialog and stage notes in different fonts, it makes it easier to read and follow who is saying and doing what. The gif that you have at the top of "It Begins" is awesome and "gorrifying" (gory and horrifying)! I also thought that separating the stories into Acts was a smart move, it is a perfect way to change the setting without having to give a lot of detail on the transition. One of my favorite parts is how "the crowd gasps" when Malcolm comes back and reveals how he escaped. I like the game the Malcolm and Lady Macbeth play when she wants her guards to take him, but he keeps asking them to wait. I can picture the guards jolting forward and then halting in confusion. I would like to know what is going through the guards' minds during all of this, but I like that you let us know what's going through Lady Macbeth's mind.
Overall, I did not come across anything that was confusing. I think you have done a fabulous job with your project!
Hi Selena,
ReplyDeleteI just read through your storybook and I think you did a really great job. I really liked the play-like format and I thought it made your stories very easy to read while at the same time allowing you to give a lot of details. It was very interesting how you made Lady Macbeth the main character and made here have a much more involved role in the events. In the final story, I was kind of wondering where Malcom got all of the evidence that he was showing. Maybe I just read the stories too quickly to remember them being mentioned in other stories? Regardless, it didn't stop me from enjoying your stories. You did an excellent job.
Hey Selena!
ReplyDeleteI am a big Shakespeare fan so this was a fun read for me. I did Theatre in high school and know of Macbeth since it is the “scottish play that shouldn’t be named” and this was such a creative twist on that. I especially liked how dark your whole website theme was. It tied in well with the dark story of Macbeth and his wife pushing him to murder. I think you did a great job drawing the reader in and making this story almost like a thriller. I do like scary things but this was just dark enough without being too scary for me. Really bringing Lady Macbeth into this story and making her a prominent, strong character was a great idea. Although she was a bad person, I was kind of proud of her in a way because she was so timid in the original and did not have much character.
Hi Selena! I like your "Be Careful What You Wish For" story! Your stories are incredibly creative and amazing with lots of unique characters and plots. I like how you so eloquently described the beginning scene of the story: “It's a full moon on a crisp night, yet the air is thick with malicious intent. Three witches converse in the woods, when suddenly their cauldron illuminates brighter than the Northern Star.” Wow.. it’s so rich in imagery and visual details. I also like the complimentary image! I think it really matches your description of the scene. I also like how this signpost like this “The planets will align in three nights. It is then that the veil between this world and mine will be thinnest allowing my inferno doors to open” navigates the readers so smoothly so people can follow your story and understand the plot. I also like how Lady Macbeth tells her story about Macbeth with so much love. I also like the dialogues between Lady Macbeth and Ursula; it’s so full of suspense and mind game. Thank you for a great story!
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